Aywen
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Post by Aywen on Dec 13, 2009 17:05:29 GMT -5
This is my first post, after being a member for so long. I never knew what to say or how I could contribute. But here is a poem I wrote.
Forever More
Dying for just another moment She slowly opens her eyes Searching for his longing gaze As he strokes her cheek Ever so gently. Her eyes meet his And he instantly understands; She is struggling to remain with him. Her gaze fades in and out of focus Intensity fading with longing Searching to remember memories They had shared so strongly, Refusing to give up. She slowly and oh so gently Captures his face In her trembling hands. She leads his face to hers Longing for one last kiss. He lets her lead him, And as their lips connect, His memories flash back Through every kiss They had ever shared Since their very first. They both close their eyes; Him with love and longing, Her with Death breathing Down her neck As she shows him And makes him finally understand She has always loved him. She forgives him of all of his faults, Every lie, every burden, every moment Of sadness that may have passed. But in the end It was always worth being with him. Her hands fall from his face Her passion slowly draining. He takes her weak hands in his, And breaks the kiss to see her One last time As her breath leaves Her pale lips. He mourns to the stars In the endless night Her name Forever more.
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Post by KG on Dec 27, 2009 18:57:32 GMT -5
WOW!!! Sorry I took so long to comment. This is just breathtaking. I mean awesome, and powerful to the point I don't even know what to say... I am rarely speachless, but this... all I can say is wow.
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Post by Ashira Bloodmoon on Dec 27, 2009 22:11:18 GMT -5
That IS a rarity when KG's speechless.
Lan: Very artfully done. I can see why she's speechless over this. I'd have said something if I'd have been paying attention to the boards when this was posted. Ash didn't tell me and she's peeking on here more than I am.
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Post by Del on Dec 28, 2009 22:54:24 GMT -5
Oh, so lovely; that's touched me deeply.
Thank you for sharing.
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Aywen
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Post by Aywen on Dec 29, 2009 14:31:43 GMT -5
Thank you all for reading my work. I'm very happy to hear you approve of it. Those I've shared it with here all say it is far too dark and depressing. But that is the whole point of the poem. Not all love is about desire and lust. This couple truly loved each other, and the point is to show that not all love is over touch. It's what one feels, what emotions love brings, and then to lose that love what pain is brought. And forgiveness and trust is part of love. I don't know if you get what I'm saying here, but thats my opinion on the poem after reading after a few weeks. heh, thank you all again for reading and commenting.
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Aywen
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Post by Aywen on Dec 31, 2009 21:09:44 GMT -5
Then again, reading what I said last over, that was just a bunch of ranting about my feelings. Haha.
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Post by ~Sephity~ on Jan 4, 2010 13:44:49 GMT -5
This is a great poem aywen. ^-^ I applaud you, keep up the good work. sounds sorta like my poetry around 9th grade.
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Aywen
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Post by Aywen on Jan 6, 2010 2:56:54 GMT -5
Thank you, Ty/Sephity. Long time no talk. xD
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